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02 May 2008 @ 12:08 pm
"Lucky in Love" by belmanoir (F/K/V, AU, NC-17)  
Title: Lucky in Love
Author: belmanoir
Prompt: 80. Character A isn't much of a gambler, but seems to have either skill or dumb luck whenever s/he does happen to play. When a high-stakes poker game ends, A finds him/herself the lucky winner... of Character B. B's significant other, C, got carried away on betting fever and too much alcohol, and gambled him/her away. From the way C spoke, A had thought C was betting a racehorse or a beloved pet or a car or something, and is horrified to find B is actually a person. A of course immediately releases B from the conditions of the bet, but to no avail.

B is so furious to have been gambled away like so much property, s/he proclaims s/he will honor the terms of the bet, and spend six weeks (or however long a span of time was wagered) with A. Over the course of the following six (or however many) weeks, B makes him/herself a general nuisance to A, hanging around, refusing to leave, offering to do nice things for him/her, freely offering his/her opinion about A's wardrobe, home, dating habits, diet and general lifestyle, rearranging things A didn't want rearranged and messing up things A didn't want messed up--in short, turning A's orderly life upside down.

Meanwhile, a hangdog C tries desperately to court B into forgiving him/her, but is it too late? Can insufferable but charming and kind-hearted B win A's heart? Will A realize s/he's won the bet of a lifetime before it's too late?

Notes: So many people to thank! dessert_first for a fantastic prompt, mrs_laugh_track and snoopypez for feedback and cheerleading above and beyond the call of duty, and most of all inseriatim for a truly kick-ass beta. Seriously guys, she went through the entire massive thing with me on chat AND was really insightful and amazing and enthusiastic.
Pairing: Fraser/Kowalski/Vecchio
Word count: 24,553
Summary: When undercover cop Ray Kowalski bets--and loses--his partner Ray Vecchio in a high-stakes poker game, their partnership may never be the same.

Lucky in Love

ETA: I wrote a little epilogue for snoopypez. All I want to do is see more, 1400 words, PWP, Kowalski blows Vecchio in the supply closet.
Jimmy Petstore: dS | shiney happysnoopypez on May 2nd, 2008 08:42 pm (UTC)

(omg so EXCITED to read this. ..again? I bet there's a lot that I HAVEN'T read, though! SO YAY!)
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 2nd, 2008 08:46 pm (UTC)
i think there's a fair amount of new stuff...among other things, hadn't i only written the second half of the last sex scene when i sent it to you?
Jimmy Petstore: dS | gazingsnoopypez on May 2nd, 2008 11:31 pm (UTC)
Let's see how many comments I end up leaving! \o/

He hadn't tied his tie badly on purpose. It wasn't like he actually knew how to tie a bowtie right. But when he'd looked in the mirror and seen that crooked, sad knot, he'd thought, Vecchio will want to fix that.
I think this is when I totally fell in love. :D

And BOYS! Sharing their jewelry! ::beams with love some more::

But knowing this crowd, he probably imported third-world children for prostitution and sold the ugly ones to glue factories.
I.. am highly amused at the idea of Fraser doing any of that. (Though it DOES now bring the whole babyfighting thing to mind..)

When it came, the guy did the whole brandy thing. He swirled it, he sniffed it, he sipped it. He looked right at Ray, the corner of his mouth curving up a little. Then he put the glass down and didn't touch it again.
See? There's a bit of spark from the start! YOU WIN AT FORESHADOWING!

Ray squinted. Hard to tell. Too blurry. Should have eaten dinner. Should have worn his glasses.

"Did he just bet you?" Gardino asked, a look of dawning delight on his face.
I just. This whole scene is BEYOND ADORABLE. God. The teasing! Huey's comment about Vecchio's stupid partner! And ooo, the fact that people in the room would know his name! And GOD, the last line. I don't know why, but it's so fantastic I could cry. WITH LOVE. BOYS.

He smirked. "Jealous, Louie?"

"You got my bracelet, Vecchio?" Kowalski mumbled. God, the guy had unerringly shitty timing.

"He gave you his bracelet?" Gardino said. "Are you guys going steady now?"


"God, how can you take this?" he demanded after fifteen minutes of thinking about Kowalski and completely destroying the structural integrity of a couple of paperclips he'd found in his pocket.
I swear, complaining!Vecchio is my favouritest EVER. And omg, I just.. seriously adore the bit when the kids come to bug Fraser. I lovelovelove how Ray finds it amusing at first and then is just like, okay, enough. <3

"Maybe if you ate occasionally you wouldn't be such a goddamn lightweight," Ray snapped, then realized that worrying about Kowalski's weight wasn't proper angry detached partner behavior.
I am like, actually literally going "heart!!" out loud.

"I'm sorry," a voice behind them said, "but if you continue to assault this man on Canadian soil, I'm afraid I will have to place you under arrest." Ray looked around, and the Mountie had come to life and was standing--really quite close, looking at them with apparently genuine apology and embarrassment.
Best Fraser semi-sorta-in a way-introduction EVER. And awww, I wonder what his thought process was for all of that insanity. Heh.

"The grades give a rough guide as to when in the season the syrup was produced. The lighter syrups--of which Grade A Light Amber is the lightest)
stray closed parenthesis! :P And also, GOD I LOVE FRASER.

Kowalski had a weird stabby skill with chopsticks--waiters tended to wince when they saw the way he held them, but he could clean every grain of rice off a plate. Fraser, on the other hand, looked like he'd been trained in proper technique by Buddhist monks. If Kowalski moved to an imaginary soundtrack of jazz or eighties punk or maybe eighties punk covers of jazz songs, then Fraser was definitely hearing classical.
Ooo, I love how you editted this bit. It's LOVELY. And I still flail at the Chinatown refrence.

He recovered quickly, but not before he discovered that Fraser's idea of a hearty back-slap was much, much harder than his own.
oh my GOD, I want to quote like every single thing here! They are just -- THEY ARE LOVE.

"Ah," Fraser said, examining the tiny piece of paper closely, and then looking right at Ray. Ray couldn't remember what color his eyes were. They looked dark in the dimly lit restaurant, and Ray caught his breath. For the first time he noticed that Fraser was actually a pretty attractive guy. "Does that answer the question?" Fraser asked.

"Of course it doesn't! Jesus."

That is, as always, both adorable and somehow hot. Heh.
belmanoir: dSbelmanoir on May 2nd, 2008 11:41 pm (UTC)

And yes, I told you, typos! It should be another double-hyphen. ::sigh::

Hee, I love how once babyfighter!Fraser is in your brain, he NEVER LEAVES!

Jewelry sharing is like, one of my favorite things ever. I guess I have a lot of those, but whatever. Why so hot?

Thank you for liking the eighties punk jazz bit--I SWEATED over that paragraph, omg.

Fraser thinks it answers the question, but he bows to Ray's greater understanding of the game. ;)
Jimmy Petstore: dS | suavesnoopypez on May 3rd, 2008 12:03 am (UTC)
Something crossed Fraser's face, and suddenly Ray was sure--the more he annoyed these people, the more Fraser was gonna want him around.
WHEEEE! And it's true! He does! :D

"I felt that the reputation of Canadian hospitality was at stake, sir," Fraser said. "And of course Detective Vecchio paid for the bed out of his personal funds." He fixed that blank gaze on his boss, and the guy just wilted.
"Oh, well, in that case," he mumbled.

Needs another line between those. :D

"He's one of the stupid ones," Ray said, taking a ten out of his wallet. "The bus to Springfield costs twenty-six bucks. Buy yourself lunch and--don't touch me."
AWWWW, and he's already starting the giving money away thing!!

He watched him introduce the Canuck and the woman--Constable Benton Fraser and Mrs. Marcotte, and the wolf was named Diefenbaker, what the fuck, 'cause hating Ray hadn't made Vecchio talk any quieter, and Ray was running background checks on all of them including the damn wolf the first chance he got, did they even make wolf licenses in Chicago?
Jesus, I love this whole part. Kowalski's voice is AMAZING and I just.. dude, it's so good. And for some reason it brought to mind how AWESOME it is that Vecchio would take this oppritunity to work a case with Fraser instead of like, sitting around moping or something. <3

Vecchio straightened and looked at Ray like he didn't even know him. Ray hadn't even realized how much that look of exasperated loyalty meant to him until it was gone. "You wanted something, Kowalski?" He sounded--fuck, he sounded like Stella, like from now on Ray just saying hello was gonna get a back off or a drop dead.

Vecchio's face contorted into one of his expressions of sneering incredulity, and Ray pressed his hand into the wall until his wrist ached to keep from kissing him.

Like Ray was trampling on the pure flower of his and the Mountie's love. ---
Yeah, okay, I wouldn't want to profane the sacred flower of you and your ex-wife's ex-love.

Dude. They share thoughts! :P

"Benny? You call him Benny? You don't even call me by my first name!" Which was stupid, because Ray loved the way Vecchio said his last name, the long A and the full L, like his name was drunk and drowning in Vecchio's mouth.

"Yeah, well, you tend to get upset when I call you Stanley," Vecchio said, rubbing his shoulder and weirdly sounding less pissed off. Sounding kinda distracted, actually.

nrrrrg, why is that so hot to me!? I love jealous Kowalski, apparently. And Vecchio's reaction is amazing and just--yaaaay.

He'd never realized there was anything ridiculous about them until Kowalski moved in. But man, Kowalski didn't shut up about them, and then when Ray'd finally given in and started getting dressed before leaving his room in the morning, Kowalski had had the nerve to look disappointed. Like making fun of Ray's pajamas was the highlight of his day. Which was kind of sad, really.

"I like stripes," Fraser said, something low and thrumming in his voice.
nrrrg some more.

And just. the KISSING. good lord, I swear, it's so hot and full of tension and amazing and THEM and and and. I still absolutely buy that this Fraser would make this move, I do.

and then..

Which was of course when Kowalski slammed open the door and said, "I knew it!"

I still find that hilarious. XD Like, poor him, of course, but.. heeeeheheheeh. Ahem.
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 3rd, 2008 12:30 am (UTC)
poor rays. they are like, the worst people to pine for each other. because vecchio is great at hiding his feelings and kinda bad at noticing other people's, and kowalski is the opposite, and it means that there's nothing for kowalski to see and of course vecchio will just go along lalala of course kowalski is still in love with stella no matter HOW PAINFULLY OBVIOUS IT IS TO EVERYONE ELSE ON EARTH...
Jimmy Petstore: dS | swing both rayssnoopypez on May 3rd, 2008 02:43 am (UTC)
"Yeah, I can do without you for a week," Kowalski said, rubbing his wrist. Fraser'd grabbed him right over his bracelet. "If you come back at the end of it."

"Well, of course I'm coming back at the end of it!" Ray said, shocked. "Jesus, Kowalski."

Kowalski's eyes darted to Fraser, and he gave a feral grin. "Don't think he knew that," he said. "Anyway, asshole, I'm here 'cause you told me to get the Marcotte case, and I did, and I have some info I was gonna share with you, and no one answered the fucking door."

Ray wasn't listening for the second half of this. Because he had looked at Fraser after Kowalski grinned, and Fraser looked--yeah, like he hadn't known that. Jesus, he looked like a kid whose parents had just told him that not only was there no Santa Claus, but Christmas was cancelled this year.

Geez, this entire thing just HURTS. BOOOYYYYS, come ON! Get your act together and DO IT!

"Fraser, Kowalski is straight. He just doesn't have any friends 'cause his wife got them all in the divorce.
Heeeee. Totally WRONG as usual, but also adorable. ;P

Christ on a unicycle, that was fucked up. Ray'd been a cop for thirteen years now, and he'd never once woken up alone in the hospital. Stella even still came to see him when he got really hurt. "Do you want me to scream at the nurse until she doubles the morphine drip?" he offered. "Vecchio did that for me last time I was in the hospital and it made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. Or maybe that was the morphine." Fraser smiled again. "No, thank you."
First, GOD I LOVE IT OMG SO CUUUUUTE!!! and then - should Fraser's dialogue be a separate paragraph?

And wheeee, talking about the romance novel! Porn! Sexual assault! \o/

It's happened before. In Donnie Brasco, he talks about these guys--"

"God, could you have more of a crush?" Ray interrupted snidely.

It's really too cute to handle. :D :D

"That's how he died," he said quietly. "He went out alone. He couldn't ask for help. He didn't call his partner."
Oh, Fraser. ::hugs him forever::

Mostly Kowalski bitching about how Lombardi smelled like garlic, and how the guy who invented Pringles should get a Nobel Prize.
Heart! And also, I think I might agree!
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 3rd, 2008 02:48 am (UTC)
should Fraser's dialogue be a separate paragraph?

I am gonna have to go over this thing with a fine-tooth comb. ::CRIES::
Jimmy Petstore: dS | prettysnoopypez on May 3rd, 2008 03:53 am (UTC)
He'd never seen a guy wrapped in so much bandaging--any excuse to keep their hands on Fraser had seemed to be the policy of the nurses at the ER.

The only time I ever really had to stop having sex with Angie or, you know, doing myself, it was 'cause I got hit in the gut.
SERIOUSLY, the mental pictures..

Fraser raised an eyebrow at him. "Thank you," he said, and then he took Ray's hand in his, brought it to his mouth and started licking it. Careful, slow strokes of his tongue, getting it nice and wet so--so Ray could jack him. Jesus. His eyes were on Ray's the whole time, dark and solemn and open, his breath still coming fast, and Ray couldn't remember the last time he was this hard.
and I just. NRRRRRRRRRRGGGGHHHHH. FOREVER. And then the next part. Um. Hi, I'm maybe having trouble BREATHING. And the LICKING. and just, you know. NRRRRGH.

"So you believe that I want to have sex with you, but not that I enjoy looking at you? That hardly seems like an indicator of a healthy self-image, Ray."
Heeeeeee. Ahem.

And then GOD, more with the HOTNESS! Seriously, I kinda hate you for it, except for how I totally don't. I, um. Dude. It's so smokin' hot that I'm like, LIGHTHEADED. The trust, the watching, the touching, the kissing, the voice, the LOOK, just--NRGH YET AGAIN.

Ray opened his mouth to tell Fraser not to get all mushy--except Ray was a firm believer in romantic mushy crap in relationships, always had been, plus what Fraser had said wasn't actually all that mushy.
That is SO CUTE. And true. heeee.

"You getting confused over there?" Kowalski asked, sounding way too amused by himself. "You're Vecchio."
God, he's such a dork. XD

'Cause I thought Canadians were supposed to be polite, and this is the shittiest hospitality I've gotten since my great-aunt Louise served us one unopened can of tuna for dinner!"
Well that's both rude and gross. ;P

"Wait a second," Ray interrupted. "He wasn't particularly industrious, but he tracked polar bears? How does that work?"
And there it is! There's the line that just screeeeams Kowalski, the line I can hear in my head like nothing else.

But now he went right around the desk, sat on the edge with his boot on the arm of Fraser's chair, and leaned right into his space. "Vecchio's pretty fucking amazing, isn't he?" he said softly.
Something that should not be so hot, and yet somehow is, oh how it is.

Oh god, when Kowalski just KNOWS? And the asking? And the struck nerve? And the ranting? And the "I want you so bad I am dying"? jkhflkdjfkslghlkdhgldGOD.

"I was staring because I wanted it so bad! Usually when shit that good happens to me, I wake up! You're the one who said you were too drunk to know what you were doing. You're the one who decided we could never talk about that again! I wanted to talk about it. I wanted to fucking blow you in the supply closet every day for the rest of our lives! I had plans for us!"
And that. That never ever gets less powerful.

Shit. Ray knew this about Vecchio, knew Vecchio couldn't read signs but somehow he'd thought Vecchio must know anyway. Ray felt it so strong it must fill the entire world, right?
oh. oh, RAY. I just.. have no words.

Fraser was right, he'd taken Vecchio for granted. He'd thought Vecchio would be there waiting when the time was right. He'd never really thought Vecchio would leave. Just like Stella. And shit, he couldn't do this again. "Vecchio--" he whispered, and hated the pleading in his own voice. "Don't. Please." He reached out a hand, finally, and Vecchio actually flinched back. And yeah, there it came, the gaping black hole inside him, begging to be filled with cheap jack and a new role, a new job. And he didn't want it. He wanted Vecchio, the softness of his skin waiting for Ray to discover it. Vecchio wanted him, he did, and Ray would be so good to him--
Oh my god, oh FUCK, I'm like, about to sob. It seriously, it HITS me close and it's beautiful and real and just. Wow.

I am so GLAD you're into happy endings.
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 3rd, 2008 10:22 pm (UTC)
happy endings ftw!

<3 <3 <3 <3

::wallows in lovely, lovely feedback::
Jimmy Petstore: dS | ot3snoopypez on May 3rd, 2008 04:31 am (UTC)
"He simply agreed to forgive Mr. 2--that is, Mr. Lombardi's debt?
Heeee, he almost called him the room number, didn't he? \o/

Awww, talk about joint custody. That's oddly adorable. Damn these guys!

The idea slammed into Vecchio like a full-body tackle. "Jesus, Kowalski, what is wrong with you? That's--" He swallowed. "The hottest thing I've ever heard, actually."

Kowalski bumped shoulders with him, casual and buddies, and somehow that just made the idea more perverse. More seductive. "I got my moments.

OMG. Just the first part by itself was hot enough, but Kowalski's casual and buddies shoulder bump and 'I got my moments'??? HOW is it so hot??

Kowalski pressed his cheek against Ray's hand, looked at Ray and Ray couldn't believe what he saw in Kowalski's eyes. Shit, he was looking at Ray the way he looked at Stella, except not--not unhappy. Kinda just--shining. "I am not ever gonna want out," he said.

"It's genetic. Probably something in the water."

"I beat you, didn't I?" Fraser asked, a hint of steel in his voice and his eyes on Kowalski's zipper. "Besides, if it's something in the water, it can't be genetic."

HEEEE! I love that. LOVE IT.

Jesus, he felt like he'd been hard for hours and the two of them were not helping his concentration.
GOD, I KNOW, RIGHT?! Kowalski all slouching and Fraser.. UNDRESSING. ;P

Fraser didn't say anything, just cocked an eyebrow at Kowalski and pushed his suspenders off his shoulders.
NRRRGH. (I really need a new noise or something.)

Like he was calculating angles.
ohjesusfuck, this entire thing is KILLING ME and it's nice to see that the first half of the sex? Just as insanely hot as the second half. Here's that lightheadedness again..

..and it turns out that it was so hot that I couldn't even copy and paste anymore. ;D

God. I just. I love this SO MUCH. And seriously, you know what? The Weak Link is not at all weak now that it's all DONE and TOGETHER. I buy it. I buy them. (You, of course, know who I mean. ;P)

And yeah, I kiiiinda yearn for actually like, getting to read Ray/Ray doin' stuff too, since it's like--all Vecchio really got to do was HIMSELF, you know? heh, BUT it makes sense, cause Vecchio was the center, it really did have to be about Vecchio/Fraser and Kowalski/Fraser because Vecchio/Kowalski had all the HISTORY, all the insane yearning and V/F happened just as fast as it does on the show, so YAY. So yeah, Vecchio's right when he said he had to let Fraser win. But you know, I am even greedier than he is, and wished for more. ;)

Tarnish notte the majesty of my TOWER of HATS: F/K/V: Wildy Bizarre Waysmeresy on May 3rd, 2008 03:40 pm (UTC)
Okay, hi, how much did I love that? A whole fucking lot.

I'd quote, like, most of it, but snoopypez seems to have that covered, so I'll just draw hearts all over it &hearts &hearts &hearts.
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 3rd, 2008 08:47 pm (UTC)
thank youuuu!
Nos: classic fishienos4a2no9 on May 3rd, 2008 08:22 pm (UTC)
Holy moly! I haven't started reading yet, but may I just say:

1. You totally picked the BEST PROMPT IN THE WORLD! I have much affection for this idea, and I can't wait to see it applied to F/K/V. \o/

2. Look at that wordcount. Just *look* at it. You? Are a total and complete superstar! GO YOU for writing longfic! *hugs you tight*

I'm off to read! And I'm taking some pie with me!
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 3rd, 2008 08:46 pm (UTC)
::beams:: yes, i basically did nothing but write this fic for the past month and a half. i hope you like it!
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Jimmy Petstore: dS | best of both worldssnoopypez on May 3rd, 2008 10:39 pm (UTC)
because you KNOW I HAVE to, right?

then Ray's ma had called his cell phone and told him that if he didn't come home for dinner she was filing a missing persons report.
heeeehehehee! Also? Best first line EVER. uh, the actual first line, not the bit I just quoted.. anyway.

And apparently Kowalski reacted to sexual satisfaction by regressing because he was chewing grape bubblegum, of all things, and Ray could smell it, plus Kowalski kept blowing bubbles and it was driving Ray crazy.
How much do I love this detail? SO FUCKING MUCH. And now I want grape bubblegum. And Kowalski.

"You okay?" He put his hand on Ray's shoulder and Ray jumped about a foot. Kowalski's eyes lit up and he started to grin. He leaned in like he was looking at Ray's paperwork over his shoulder and murmured right in Ray's ear, "You wanna take me for a test drive, Vecchio?"
guh, and YAY! And the awesome act they put on! \o/ BOYS!

"I've never done it before, but I don't figure there's much to it," Kowalski said
I forgot to mention before that I kinda love when Kowalski's the non-experienced one. Especially here, since, you know, he's been with Stella forever and just ended that a YEAR ago, so. heh. Plus, it makes his wanting to blow Vecchio forever even HOTTER.

"I figure you can do pretty much anything and talk at the same time. Tell me."

Kowalski was sucking and slurping and Ray'd always wondered if the toothpicks were because he'd quit smoking but no, apparently Kowalski just really liked having something in his mouth because he was making more noise than Ray.

and god, the tattoo licking mention and the humming his NAME and just. NRGH FOREVER.

Kowalski took the bracelet off and handed it over, staring at his feet--but when Ray wrapped it around his own wrist, Kowalski's eyes shot straight to his.

"What, you think I was gonna throw it away?" Maybe he should have, it was gonna look ridiculous with all his suits, but it was worth it for the look on Kowalski's face.

okay, OMG THE AWWWWWWWW!!! (also hot) Like, the fact that maybe Kowalski did think that, but gave it to him ANYWAY, and then the added awesomeness of Vecchio still worrying about how it would look with his SUITS! Hee!

"Listen, Kowalski, I don't care who knows," he said. "I'd wear your letterman's jacket too if you had one."

"Stella still has it," Kowalski said, and somehow that was the funniest thing Ray had ever heard.


I just. I can't believe you wrote this for meeeee. :D :D :D Just YAY and AWW and what else can I get out of you? ;)
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 3rd, 2008 10:47 pm (UTC)
seriously, how cute would kowalski blowing purple bubbles be? SERIOUSLY?

also that bracelet IS going to look ridiculous with all of vecchio's suits.

and yes i think vecchio would be the BEST at dirty talking bc once he got over feelings stupid his mouth would just go on autopilot. i don't think he'd even REMEMBER half the shit he said later and mmmm.........

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Sonia: Shark!mrs_laugh_track on May 3rd, 2008 11:03 pm (UTC)
OH HI EPILOGUE. I love it so much. Just yes hotness. And bracelets. And this:
"Depends on the context," Kowalski said. "I guess I can't really think of a context where I would though. Why, did someone compare you to a Ferrari? Doesn't seem like Fraser's style."


belmanoirbelmanoir on May 3rd, 2008 11:09 pm (UTC)
My Endless Fascination With The Rays' Jewelry Let Me Show You It.

thanks! ♥
Luzulaluzula on May 4th, 2008 07:39 pm (UTC)
Squee! A long F/K/V AU! I will save this up like candy. And then I'll print it out and read it.
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 4th, 2008 07:43 pm (UTC)
:) fkv epics ftw!
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elliefairofface on May 4th, 2008 10:01 pm (UTC)
yay fic! i never comment but i should. you cheered me up in the middle of exam week so thank you.

iv'e also never really got into the whole f/v/k thing or even vecchio/anybody but i feel inspired to go read some more! i love this fandom i hope it never ends!
belmanoir: dSbelmanoir on May 5th, 2008 03:28 am (UTC)
wow, thank you!! i'm so glad you commented. just knowing that i have done something to share my deep and abiding love for vecchio makes me incredibly happy. and yes, this is the awesomest fandom ever! hottest guys, best fans, EVERYTHING. <333333

good luck on your exams!
Jade Lennox: due south: ot3 speechlessjadelennox on May 5th, 2008 05:57 pm (UTC)
I love romance novels, and I love OT3. And good romance genre style is hard to pull off same-sex at the best of times, let alone with a threesome. You did a great job here, layering on the tension and the artifical barriers just right. Sweet!
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 5th, 2008 09:07 pm (UTC)
you know, i feel like my style is pretty romance-novel-influenced generally since i read so many. i'm not sure i really did much different than usual here apart from using the harlequin plot. i really think romance novels are more flexible than has been taken advantage of!!

thank you!! i'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Jade Lennox: due south: v/k jealousyjadelennox on May 5th, 2008 06:10 pm (UTC)
Just read the sequel.

belmanoirbelmanoir on May 5th, 2008 09:07 pm (UTC)
kayaking down the stream of consciousness: FKV - OT3mergatrude on May 7th, 2008 04:26 am (UTC)
I'm having a crappy day, and this story-plus-epilogue just completely made everything bad crawl up and die with the completely happy-making AWESOMENESS of Ray and Fraser and Ray and yes! Thank you! Thank you very kindly.
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 7th, 2008 04:30 am (UTC)
thank YOU!!! hearing that my fic has improved someone's day is like, my FAVORITE thing. ray and fraser and ray and yesss!
keerawakeerawa on May 8th, 2008 06:04 am (UTC)
This was so good! Your AU Fraser was so very, very alone. Bringing his father's killers to justice alone. And that bit about him never having company in the hospital before was gut-wrenching.

Ray's Sleek lines. Italian. had me in stitches, and then when he got all aggressive when Fraser was about to turn down the stake because it was an insult to Vecchio, brilliant!

If Kowalski moved to an imaginary soundtrack of jazz or eighties punk or maybe eighties punk covers of jazz songs, then Fraser was definitely hearing classical. was a great way of describing them.

The fortune cookie game, and Fraser forcing Dief to play because it's an American custom, was so sweet.

Something crossed Fraser's face, and suddenly Ray was sure--the more he annoyed these people, the more Fraser was gonna want him around. Passive-aggressive Fraser makes me go yay!

The sex scene between Vecchio and Fraser, when Fraser asks him to stay and let him watch, was SO very hot.

"What, then? 'Cause I thought Canadians were supposed to be polite, and this is the shittiest hospitality I've gotten since my great-aunt Louise served us one unopened can of tuna for dinner!" Oooo, Ray goes for the courteous-Candian throat!

Ray's solution, that they can play poker to see who gets to fuck him (and rigging the game so Fraser wins, of course) was so damn brave. And I liked Vecchio getting off on the cuddling.

It left me with a happy, satisfied feeling, like an excellent meal. Thanks for writing it!
keerawakeerawa on May 8th, 2008 06:05 am (UTC)
Oh, I almost forgot, Huey and Louis teasing Vecchio about them going steady was PRICELESS.
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keerawakeerawa on May 8th, 2008 06:13 am (UTC)
And as for the epilogue ...
This was like getting a Ferrari for Christmas and having to go to work the next day without driving it. Best. Analogy. Ever.

what else I got that anyone would want?" Awwwwwww!

My fandom has supply-closet blow-jobs. All the other fandoms are JEALOUS.
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 8th, 2008 09:14 pm (UTC)
Re: And as for the epilogue ...
i know this is the BEST fandom!!! mmmm supply-closet blowjobs.
M'lyn: due South Vneckmlyn on May 12th, 2008 02:59 am (UTC)
Come on, mind on the job. Not your partner's fingers and all the places you wish he'd put them.

Kowalski crushing on Vecchio is, like, my most favorite Ray/Ray thing EVER.

Gardino and Huey are PERFECT, btw.

That was some really well-kept leather.

Trust Ray that the first thing he admires about Fraser is how well he keeps his leather. Not just the quality, but the caretaking. That's some genius characterization right there.

"His wire deformed his tuxedo by 3 millimeters," Fraser said.

Ray stared.

Fraser stared blankly back.

That interchange is pure comedy gold.

"Benny? You call him Benny? You don't even call me by my first name!"

Hee! This is what makes a great AU: the familiar turned on its head, presented in a new way.

"I wasn't figuring on anything too athletic. But your gut's okay, right? The only time I ever really had to stop having sex with Angie or, you know, doing myself, it was 'cause I got hit in the gut."

I love the patter that both Rays have; their voices are really wonderful.

he took Ray's hand in his, brought it to his mouth and started licking it.

God, I love Fraser and his weird kinky sex behaviors. I mean, he is not the first to lick someone's hand for a hand job, but you KNOW Fraser's doing it all dirty, slowly and to great effect.

"Well, I certainly don't plan to shut my eyes, Ray."

That's...the fucking perviest Fraser-statement ever in existence. Perfect voice, all nonchalant and "I'm going to get off again by watching you, if you don't mind." NRRGH.

he just knew he wanted to hear Fraser's voice when he came for the rest of his life.

Me too, please!

"Perhaps there is a value in knowing when to quit," and there was another sucker punch, bam!

I LOVE Fraser's unexpected zingers. It's canonical proof (in the show, anyway) that Fraser is not oblivious or naive.

"We both know he's gonna have to choose. Don't be so sure it'll be you."

Man, Kowalski and Fraser fighting over Vecchio is unbearably hot.

he turned his head and looked straight at Ray. Didn't move his hand, just let his eyes run over Ray, down to his dick which was sticking straight out of his pants. He probably looked pretty stupid but Kowalski didn't seem to think so. He stared at Ray's cock and licked his lips.

But that pretty much tops it, I think. I'm done. Good night, and thank you!
belmanoirbelmanoir on May 12th, 2008 03:15 am (UTC)
eeeeeee! lovely detailed feedback!!!!!

Kowalski crushing on Vecchio is, like, my most favorite Ray/Ray thing EVER.

omg i know right? i think crushing on vecchio is my most favorite thing ever generally. there isn't enough fraser-pov f/v in the world!

Gardino and Huey are PERFECT, btw.

thank you!! i love them like burning so that is nice to hear.

God, I love Fraser and his weird kinky sex behaviors.

yes! it's like, he HAS inhibitions, but they are DIFFERENT inhibitions. or something. this is the insight i had recently about fraser giving backalley blowjobs. like, when ray and ray give each other backalley blowjobs it's because they think that's hot, or they can't control themselves, or something, right? like there'd be that zing of doing something forbidden and public. but if fraser gave ray a blowjob in an alley, it would be because he wanted to give ray a blowjob and didn't really see being in an alley as a reason not to. which is hot in its own way. um. that got really tangenty but whatever i like to think about it. :)

That's...the fucking perviest Fraser-statement ever in existence.

\o/\o/\o/ that may actually be the best compliment i have EVER received. i want a plaque! i would hang it on my door.

I LOVE Fraser's unexpected zingers. It's canonical proof (in the show, anyway) that Fraser is not oblivious or naive.

YESYESYES. When the gloves come off, watch out world.

Man, Kowalski and Fraser fighting over Vecchio is unbearably hot.

There is seriously NOT ENOUGH OT3 fic with this dynamic. And it seems just as plausible as the Rays fighting over Fraser or Fraser and Vecchio fighting over Kowalski, which you see fairly often.

Thank youuuu for this fantastical comment! I am so glad you enjoyed it.
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Cats. Not to be trusted.: ds fkv togethercatwalksalone on May 23rd, 2008 05:40 pm (UTC)
I have had this tab open FOREVER, sorry.

This was wonderful. I particularly liked just how much the love Kowalski had for Vecchio shone through. HE LOVES HIM SO MUCH. Just like me! It's really great to see Vecchio to get to be the centre of attention, because he so deserves it.

I think I may be getting more OTPish because I was actually upset with Vecchio for his interest in Fraser on Kowalski's behalf, though I completely understand Vecchio's reasoning and guh, it's Fraser. And Fraser, poor darling, so alone. You drew that beautifully. But yay, it all worked out and I nearly died of the hot and wonderful of the epilogue. Oh, my boys. *smishes them and you*
belmanoir: dS hood ornamentbelmanoir on May 23rd, 2008 08:55 pm (UTC)
Aw, thanks!!! When Kowalski loves someone, he doesn't fuck around, does he? And seriously, I want more ot3 fic with Vecchio in the middle. VECCHIO!!

Ray/Ray and F/V fight a constant battle for possession of my heart. (Good thing I don't have to choose!) I'm glad you were able to enjoy the story despite Kowalski's trauma! It's actually probably a good sign that you felt that way because one of the things I was worried about wrt this prompt was whether Kowalski betting Vecchio would be an issue for ppl. So far, no one's been the least bit put off, which, yay!
The Gauche in the Machine: F/K/V - they all love each otherchina_shop on May 29th, 2008 07:56 am (UTC)
Fraser picked up his cookie and eyed it seriously. "Is Canada the world's largest producer of zinc?"

That line made me laugh out loud with delight on the bus. Oh Fraser! ♥ ♥ ♥

So yes, I finally had a chance to read this, and I particularly loved the Fraser/Vecchio stuff in here -- so sweet and awkwardly compromised, and yet undeniable and irresistible and, oh boys! I don't really get the betting-people-in-poker thing, but this was a fabulous read anyway. *squishes all three of them into a smooshcake, and then twirls you*
belmanoir: dSbelmanoir on May 29th, 2008 11:21 pm (UTC)
Oh Fraser indeed! *I'm* not even sure if he really doesn't get why that isn't the right kind of question or if he's just messing with Vecchio.

I'm so glad you enjoyed it despite gambling not being one of your kinks! (I must admit it's been one of mine since middle school so I was pretty excited to get to write it.) ::twirls you back::
blackberrybellechase65 on June 6th, 2008 04:31 am (UTC)
Well there was a lot about this that I liked. I especially liked that anger in the beginning. It was really raw. What they said to each other in those moments rang authentic. Anger is one of the things I really like to see in m/m slash. I read other f/v/k, but I don't think I've read that many where Ray was the primary bone of contention and that was nice to see.
spuffydudsspuffyduds on October 31st, 2008 03:55 am (UTC)


Most bestest thing: If Kowalski moved to an imaginary soundtrack of jazz or eighties punk or maybe eighties punk covers of jazz songs, then Fraser was definitely hearing classical.


Okay, maybe a tie for most bestest thing: Vecchio's old partner becoming a FEEB and starting to TALK IN UNISON. BWEEEEEE!
belmanoir: dS vecchio heartbelmanoir on October 31st, 2008 03:57 am (UTC)
omg spuffy I LOVE YOU!


thank you.
spuffydudsspuffyduds on October 31st, 2008 04:00 am (UTC)
I JUST. Kowalski putting his GRAPE GUM on the DOORFRAME so he can have it later. *flails with love*
spuffydudsspuffyduds on October 31st, 2008 04:02 am (UTC)
And I meant to put that on the sequel and...MISSED, somehow.
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